Here I am on the HO Comp Freeride. Note the nose clip. Any glaring issues with my form?

Looks pretty good.

Nice.

My 2c in terms of do what I say and not what I do is maybe get your hips a little more forward and your hands lower and closer to your body near your outside hip at that point in the turn?...or at least they should be headed there soon.

Check out this short video and watch his hand/ski handle movement: http://www.waterskimag.com/article.jsp?ID=53296

Yes, hips more forward get your body straighter and bring your arms in. It looks like your are trying to stand back up? Try digging the rear of the ski in and lean into your turn a bit harder.
You may be getting pulled bit slow also.

I agree with boatsrule...you might speed up 2mph. You appear to be "dragging" a little.

Yep hips forward and maybe 1 or 2 mph faster. By the look of you ,approximately 30 to 32 mph should be around right.Best advice spend as much time behind the boat as possible.
Enjoy your Summer
Ardy
South Australia